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Your fire is a hellish flower
A yellow glow of rage and light
Consuming in my darkest hour
Receding deep into the night

And bleeding from the willow trees
A lifeless substance, yet, alive
Retreating to my memories
One lost, one found, now we are five

And in this war that wages on
We find ourselves now enemies
Prepare for battle, fight at dawn
Search for the one that holds the keys

The gentle breeze that blows your hair
As you stand staring at the sea
My hopeful look returns your stare
With two more lost, now we are three

The blood was shed upon the field
The lives were lost, each one in vain
We used them as a human shield
As God sent down a piercing rain

That washed the blood clean from the grass
And let the world forget the fight
But not a war of guns and brass
Internal wars that burn and bite

And ripped apart the heart of one
And far away his spirit flew
When he, in search for hope, found none
With one more lost, now we are two

We thought that it had come to end
We realize now, it's just begun
In losing you, my blood, my friend,
I stand alone, for I am one

In losing faith and trust in God
We find ourselves lost once again
Protected still by staff and rod
From hate within the hearts of men.
©2004-2009 ~elephantrock
:iconelephantrock:

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its besically about my dad leaving, my mo getting remarried, and losing my older brother.

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:iconkids:
wow. that is...really good... i really do like.. YAY! good job! wonderful oh yah! haha
:iconelephantrock:
YAY!! people who like my poems..... :D

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Smells like raisins.
:iconkids:
yah your poem rules!
:iconelephantrock:
thanky!!!

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Smells like raisins.
:iconbluefireangel25:
i LOVE this one...this is my favorite part.."But not a war of guns and brass
Internal wars that burn and bite"

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(¸.·´ (¸.·' whitney
:iconelephantrock:
YAY!!

thats my favorite part too :D

this is prolly my favorite thing that ive written..

im glad you like it!! :hug:

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Smells like raisins.
:iconwalrustimehascome:
i love the vivid imagery throughout the poem. the words are so ferocious and violent that the entire pace of the ballad just kind of forges along on pure emotion. "Your fire is a hellish flower" and the last "In losing faith and trust in God/We find ourselves lost once again/Protected still by staff and rod/From hate within the hearts of men." utter genius. absolute utter genius. i am speechless, but that's okay because i'm typing, not talking... :)
:iconelephantrock:
thank you so much!!!!!!!!

thats the best comment anyone has ever given me!!! :hug: :heart: :blowkiss:

thank you SOOO MUCHHH!!!!

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Smells like raisins.
:iconwalrustimehascome:
that's the best comment? you poor underappreciated soul. :hug:

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Damn the man.

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